You asked. I’m a bit of a pedant when it comes to stuff like this, so sorry in advance.
Looked at the second one only, and while taking a quick coffee break, so I may have missed some stuff.
Generally, a solid, clean, slide deck. Would hold attention of those you are presenting to.
My main issues are mostly grammatical and spelling typos, especially if it’s a pro presentation to outsiders and clients. When working with text, I urge my students to do two things: put all their text through Word (or an equivalent) regardless of how they intended using it; and read everything aloud.
You’d be amazed (horrified even!) at how many event adverts, business plan summaries, recipe cards, and restaurant menus I’ve seen with glaringly obvious spelling and grammar errors. (I once got an assignment submission that included a costing sheet for a fried aborigine dish. The aubergines were very offended at being cancelled.)
Some of your sentence structure is a tough read. It could be I don’t understand the content or context, but read the words on your screen aloud and you’ll hear what I‘m saying. There needs to be more breaks in some of them. Shorter sentences. Read the body text on the first Overview slide aloud for example.
Spelling! The first two I spotted are on your opening slide. The last one is on one of the mockups you show. There could be more.
- functionlaity
- identitfy
- estabished
- condusive
- effecient
- behaviors - US spelling
- desinging
- estimaiting
You use “we are” and “we’re” on same slide (“here’s the predicted outcome…”). Pick one and use it consistently. You use short forms more on other slides – here’s, it’s, etc. - so stick to that. Also, what’s with the – at the end of that slide title and nowhere else?
There’s a double “the the” on the 2nd line of the “here’s how it’s done” text.
Decide if you’re American or English. Either way, use it consistently: empathising vs. empathizing for example. You use one of each.
Capitalise the start of “through collaborative and inclusive…” on predicted outcome to match the others.
Why the ? after some headings? “a look into issues around the desktop?” “let’s look at the search and tables?” Neither of those are questions.
Visually, your slides are good. Maybe consider carrying the heading text colour on your title slide and name highlight to the rest of the headings through the deck, just to bring some colour to the slides.
My only other note might be to increase the font size on the smallest text blocks, but again, might just be my old eyes.
All-in-all, if you follow the same approach and structure for your new presentation, you’ll be aces. Just check and recheck it for errors. And then get a fresh set of eyes to look it over one last time too.
Should this discussion be moved over to a separate topic? Anything existing it fits into? Or do you want to make a new topic? It could be your Brute Force topic entry for the week!